Comments on: Chapter One http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html My Memoir/Novel in a Serialized format. New Chapters each week. Thu, 09 Feb 2012 18:06:46 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: Rita http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html/comment-page-1#comment-27364 Rita Sun, 13 Jun 2010 04:13:32 +0000 http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html#comment-27364 I'm just starting to read your book. I agree that it's well written and draws the reader right into the scene. Your father infuriates me. What would make a man treat an innocent child that way? I wonder if his father abused him. That wouldn't excuse his cruelty. What a sicko. I’m just starting to read your book. I agree that it’s well written and draws the reader right into the scene. Your father infuriates me. What would make a man treat an innocent child that way? I wonder if his father abused him. That wouldn’t excuse his cruelty. What a sicko.

]]> By: Terri http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html/comment-page-1#comment-23672 Terri Tue, 06 Oct 2009 17:32:32 +0000 http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html#comment-23672 I need to read further--this is why you ran away and became a streetboy? What bravery, even if it led to something you chose to move away from, later. To go away from the content and into the form: this is SO clear. This is good writing; your paragraph breaks are just right. Poor little kid; like Carol, I wish I could console him. But that's not how it goes; your history is your history, and you made yourself into the adult you are. I need to read further–this is why you ran away and became a streetboy? What bravery, even if it led to something you chose to move away from, later.

To go away from the content and into the form: this is SO clear. This is good writing; your paragraph breaks are just right.

Poor little kid; like Carol, I wish I could console him. But that’s not how it goes; your history is your history, and you made yourself into the adult you are.

]]> By: Carol http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html/comment-page-1#comment-23539 Carol Mon, 28 Sep 2009 19:39:28 +0000 http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html#comment-23539 I can't even express how strong is my urge to hold that little boy in my arms and take him away from that monster. I'm so glad I know how you turned out as I read this. I can’t even express how strong is my urge to hold that little boy in my arms and take him away from that monster. I’m so glad I know how you turned out as I read this.

]]> By: kristin http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html/comment-page-1#comment-23451 kristin Fri, 25 Sep 2009 19:01:58 +0000 http://www.wecould2.com/chapter-one.html#comment-23451 what can i say? what can i say?

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